"Rozkwitały pąki białych róż" - tłumaczenie

Wrzucam tu swoje tłumaczenie polskiej piosenki żołnierskiej "Rozkwitały pąki białych róż". Niestety, raczej nie udało mi się zachować rytmu, dlatego przyjmę wszelkie uwagi dot. ew. jego usprawnienia. :)

http://www.ewa.bicom.pl/piosenki/patriotyczne/patr29.htm - tekst oryginalny

tłumaczenie:

The buds of the white roses bloom,

Come back, my Johny, from this bloody war,

Return and kiss me, as you did ago,

I shall give thee then  fairest of white roses/x2

I was laying thee, going forth to fight

Flowers of white roses upon your rifle

Before you went, my Johny, went away from here

Before you were gone, the flowers had died/x2

Upon the steppe lies an impenetrable fog

The wind in grasses quietly sobs

The winter has come, the flowers've lied down

Johny went away, and his trail is gone/x2

White roses's buds have lost their blossom

The summer has passed, the autumn, the winter's already

What shall I give thee, my Johny, hey

When you come back from war to the girl of thine?

Hey, oh girl, the uhlan died in fight

Although you'd handed him a flower of white rose

Was dishonest the gift of thy hand

Or maybe your heart's heat had faded away?/x2

Upon the empty field the cold wind is blowing

No more shall you see your Johny, no

The cruel death is taking bloody loot

Johny of thine is buried in grave.

Johny does need anything no-more

For the buds of roses blossom for him now

There, near the ravine, where he fell in battle

A flower of white rose has grown on the barrow /2

Do not sorrow, fairy maiden, no

In the Polish land his soul shall be fine

Counted will be his effort and pain

For the motherland fell beloved thine.